Waiting – A Flash Story #SOLC Day 6

I am participating in a flash fiction contest hosted by Indie Unlimited and you can read my flash story below the photo. Flash fiction is a great medium to use with students. The short word count makes it appealing and there is a zing to it! I will be posting soon some of my favorite flash authors but Kathy Fish and Lydia Davis are two to start with if you want to pursue that rabbit hole!

You can click here to vote for your favorite story written from this beautiful photograph.

Please vote for your favorite story! Of course I would love if mine is your favorite! After clicking on the link above, click the circle next to my name: TAMMY BREITWEISER, then click on the VOTE box at the bottom of the names. It is above the phrase VOTING RESULTS.

Thank you so much!

At the top of the hill I wait for my normal breath to return and gaze back on the trail hill I just sprinted up. The waves of Lake Michigan are crashing on the shore caressing the sand. Partners forever. I am glad I decided to run without headphones today. My thoughts are bombarding me with enough noise as it is. The same phrase is on repeat How did you not see?

My life will not be the same when I return to the car. The papers will be signed. The friends and assets will be divided, and not to be confused. It is a moment of before and after.

I have beat myself up with an emotional bat and today I physically match. My thighs and calves are burning from running in the sand. The small of my back is wet with sweat and ache. A trickle of sweat is making the space between my breasts itch but I can’t get to it because of the layers. I do not know how long I have been out here but  I have run the same loop three times. My heart still works. It is pounding trying to get out but I have to keep it caged at least 4 seasons. It needs to heal before it can be open to breaking again.


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10 thoughts on “Waiting – A Flash Story #SOLC Day 6

  1. Wow! I love yours, the inference you demand of your readers. I would use this as a mentor text for high school and college students for certain! I have had eighth graders write flash fiction before, but it is a tough thing to capture the reader as completely as you do here. I love the fulcrum moment: “My life will not be the same when I return to the car.” The end is terrific—fantastic word choice “caged” and “breaking” suggesting prison, too. Brilliant.

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  2. Wow! So powerful. I’m intrigued by the line, “My heart still works. It is pounding trying to get out but I have to keep it caged at least 4 seasons. It needs to heal before it can be open to breaking again.” I’ll give this flash writing a try!

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  3. Flash fiction is a genre I have always wanted to try, but have always been too scared! Love this one. There is so much said in such few words! I love how you started with the waves and sand as forever partners, and then end with the separation and breaking heart! Well done!

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